"Windows detected a hard disk problem" - Do I go into too much detail?

People have told me many times in my life that I am way too wordy when I write. That's not exactly how they say it. They'll say, "It's very detailed!" or "Can we maybe trim this section down?"

Well, I'm sorry. Actually, I'm sorry I'm not sorry. No, I was not trying to bore the external auditor to death. It is his job to read boring stuff all day. If I could actually bore a man like that to death, I would quit my job and be on C-SPAN within 6 months.

So, this will be a short post.

Windows detected a hard disk problem

Text: Windows detected a hard disk problem
Back up your files immediately to prevent information loss, and then contact the computer manufacturer to determine if you need to repair or replace the disk.

This means you need a new hard drive.